一. 范文赏析。
(2014大纲卷)
第二节 书面表达(满分25分)
一家英语报社向中学生征文,主题是“十年后的我”、请根据下列要求和你的想象完成短文、家庭工作业余生活
注意:1、次数100左右; 2、可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯; 3. 开头语已为你写好
I often imagine what my life will be like in the future.
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【参考范文】
I often imagine what my life will be like in the future. I think my life will be very different in ten years. I will be twenty-eight years old by then. I will have my own family, Probably with a lovely child. I hope I will work in a computer company as a program designer. I will enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues; I will do a good job in whatever I do. In my free time, I will continue to take regular exercise, such as swimming, running and various ball
games. On my holidays, I will travel around the world. In a word, my life will be much richer and more colorful. (除去已给的开头105词)
赏析:本文语言朴实,虽然没有华丽的、高端的句型,而只用了一些如宾语从句、such as、in a word等一些初中就学过的短语或句型,但文章语法是没有毛病的、语言是流畅的、逻辑是清晰的,读完短文我们丝毫体会不到任何的别扭或不适。这其实就是作文的最高境界:用朴实的语言文字表达真实、自然的思想感情,就像老舍只用了约2400个单字,而写出的10万多字的《骆驼祥子》却感动了无数人是一样的道理。一篇文章的好坏主要取决于它是否走心,是否能调动读者的思绪跟着笔者走,而和使用很难的语法点关系不大。
再回到本文,要说语言方面的难点和亮点大概就是框出来的那些了,但,实话说,它们全是初中的点。而它们居然可以成为高考范文的亮点,原因无非就是我上面说的那些。
(2014江西卷)
假定你是星光中学的高中毕业生李华,母校将为高一新生举办主题为“What to learn in senior high school?”的英语沙龙活动,特邀请你结合自身经历谈谈自己的体会。请根据以下提示准备一份英语发言稿。
1.学会学习:方法,习惯等;
2.学会做人:真诚,友善;
3.学会其他:考生自拟。
注意:1.词数120左右;
2.发言稿开头和结尾已给出,不须抄在答题卡上,不计入总次数。
Good morning, everyone! It is my honor to be here to share with you my opinions on what to learn in senior high school.
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Thank you!
【参考范文】
Good morning, everyone!
It is my honor to be here to share with my opinions on what to learn in senior high school. In the coming three years, our school life will be challenging. First, we should learn to learn efficiently. Personally, I used to try effective method to achieve my academic goals. Developing a good habit is also of importance. It really benefited me a lot to preview lessons, get actively involved in class, and review what had been taught after class. In addition, we should learn how to get along well with others. In school, I respected teachers and was friendly with classmates. It was with sincerity and faithfulness that we created a harmonious atmosphere. Finally, we should take part in sports and outdoors activities frequently. They were really helpful to build up my body and enrich my school life. No pains no gains. I am sure that with great efforts , you will enjoy a colorful and fruitful life here.
Thank you!
赏析:这是一篇提纲类作文,也很棒,作者的思路和刚才那篇很不一样。作者试图在文中尽量去使用平时积累的好的好词(如enrich)、短语(如in addition, used to 等)、句型(宾从、主语从句、强调句等)、谚语已经高中学过的各种语法等。把高中阶段所学的最具代表性的好词、短语、句型和语法点尽量表现在高考作文中的做法自然是明智的,因为,你可以想想,为什么高考要考作文?无非是阅卷人想知道你在高中三年中到底学了什么。那你就表现给他看呗,他看到你学得不错,自然给高分。所以如上框中所示,全是让阅卷人拍手叫好的亮点,而且全没有语法错误,这作文自然高分。
二. 好作文的标准。
赏析完范文,我们来看看什么是考场上的好作文。
1. 书写美观。面对“日理万机”的阅卷老师,考生还教些如上厕所的手纸般的卷纸上去,结果你自己想去吧。
2. 语法拼写无误。错误的语法和单词拼写,全是扣分点。
3. 思路清晰、层次分明。这一点就好比没有人喜欢听语无伦次的人讲话是一样的。
4. 句型高端。这一点上我们可以想象,如果马克吐温全用简单句写作,结果会是怎样。所以我们应该多用并列连词和从属连词,多造长句、从句。
5. 语言地道。这一点难度最大。一个四川人在云南生活了20年,然而只要他一说话人们照样
一秒钟辨别出他是四川人的原因是他的四川话很地道而云南话却不地道。地道的四川话在于它特有的词汇、句型、口音、语气以及思维方式。英语也是。所以,英语要学得地道,就的模仿英语本土人的用词、本土人的口音、本土人的常用句型和本土人的思维方式。否则难免会出现你明明是在讲英语或写英语,而别人一听或一读就知道你是昆明人,这就糟糕了。
三、句型高端是英语作文的核心。
实践中,往往做到用高端句型造句是难点。这就是老师老要求学生背句型、用句型造句的原因。下面我们来看看一些初高中阶段的部分经典句型。
1. it is believed \\said\\reported that + 从句 “人们相信\\据说\\据报道…”
2. There is no doubt that … 是毫无疑问的
3. if 条件句
4. it is +被强调对象+that …
5. only in this way can we …
6. on the one hand,… on the other hand,…
7. those who +定从 are …
8. the advantage of doing sth. is that ….
9. it is obvious that …
10. while, when, as soon as, not … until 等引导的时间状语从句
11. although 引导的让步状语从句
12.Ving 做主语
13. not only… but also …, both … and …, neither … nor …, either… or…, 的并列句
14. 限定性定从,和非限定性定从。
15. the 比较级…, the比较级
16. 名词性从句
17. by doing this, we can surely….
18. what’s more important is that…
19. in other words, …
20. according to….
21. on the contrary, …
22. take … for example,..
23. that’s why +句子
四、补充说明。
面对高考作文,学生要自己总结属于你自己的语料库。不妨找一个笔记本,把你觉得有用的、常见的、你喜欢的好词、短语、句型和表达收集起来并且用它们多造几个句子,保证每次需要的时候都能够写正确,那么不用多,高中3年,你只要积累100个,那么写篇高考作文那是轻而易举的事。
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